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Other editions. Enlarge cover. Error rating book. Refresh and try again. Open Preview See a Problem? Details if other :. Thanks for telling us about the problem. Return to Book Page. Preview — Snowflakes and Embers by S. Snowflakes and Embers Snowflakes and Embers 1 by S. Deseem was to be a gift to God, trained from birth to be a priest but when his father, the king, is short on allies and heirs he's ordered to become a Bentan Bride.

Left with no choices and options he braces himself for the worst. Liam is used to how his magic frightens people and he's learned to like his isolation. He's content being a Watcher and finds real joy in his wor Deseem was to be a gift to God, trained from birth to be a priest but when his father, the king, is short on allies and heirs he's ordered to become a Bentan Bride.

He's content being a Watcher and finds real joy in his work. The last thing he wants is a Bentan Bride. When destiny and chance bring them together they both have to struggle to build a new life. Status: Complete Word count: approx. Get A Copy. Published first published More Details Edition Language.

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Where can I find this book? See all 4 questions about Snowflakes and Embers…. Lists with This Book. Community Reviews. Showing Average rating 4. Rating details. More filters. Sort order. Start your review of Snowflakes and Embers. Jun 03, Geekygirl Gamer rated it it was ok Shelves: mary-sue , promising-beginning , what-is-grammar , plotholes-ahoy.

Okay, I just finished this. Let the review begin. The summary sounded really promising, and the beginning of the story was great as well. Prince Deseem is fourteen years old when he's told he will be married off to a stranger once he's a little older for an alliance in order to strengthen Bastion, his father's kingdom, which is currently at war with Corena, a neighbouring country.

So far, so good. Liam, Prince of Corena, recently lost his beloved wife in the war. He has not yet had time to mourn fo Okay, I just finished this. He has not yet had time to mourn for her when he is told he will have to remarry for an alliance - the youngest Bastion Prince of all people, son to the man responsible to his wife's death. Still good. Why did I not love the book, then? Why only two stars? The answer is simple: The writing totally killed it for me.

I'll start lightly; the names bothered me. I agree that fantasy countries can have their own languages and, as a result, pretty fancy names.

Deseem, for example, is a nice name that's not too fancy and still easy enough to pronounce while not being some everyday name. Deseemdamiah is pushing limits. Irend - nice, creative.

Hard to remember. My personal favorite, though, was Restonarinach. Seriously, I'll be fluent in Dothraki before I learn to pronounce that.

Every time he appeared, I stumbled over the name, which kind of ruined the flow. The last name that really bothered me was Malcome. I actually wondered whether the author had misspelled Malcolm. Looks weird to me, but oh well The names were misspelled on more than one occasion.

Liam and Deseem became Laim and Dessem. I'm a stickler for spelling, I know that, and I'm willing to overlook some things, but misspelling a main character's name?

That's a big NO. There were also chard - or charred? Some mistakes actually changed the meaning of a sentence, others just plain annoyed me Payne likes to keep her main and subordinate sentences strictly separated, and it turns out that question marks are an amazing means to achieve that.

If you want to write an if clause? Just slam a question mark in there! It works once, but not every. Same goes for question marks after indirect questions.

Using it once is okay, using it all the time makes it seem like you don't know that's not how it's supposed to be.

Other than that, there were commas in all the wrong places. Before commas, for example, or in the middle of a simple sentence that has no need of a comma.

I was, however, missing commas in other places, so the average number of commas in the story was probably correct, only the placement might need improvement. Another big point, the flow. Actually, if it hadn't been for the other flaws, this one would have gone largely unnoticed, but I had to distract myself with something. The beginning of the story was great, really.

I got really into it could relate to the characters as much as one can relate to someone in their situation. And then, it started. Understandable, really. He's scared of what might await him in their wedding night, and even after that, he's afraid of what his husband might do to him.

Okay, I get that. But then, the cleansing is reversed. Deseem is still shy - sure, you don't just forget about the rules you've followed for as long as you remember - but eventually, he starts voicing his opinions and so on.

Liam likes it too. Every time Deseem does something, Liam thinks something along the line of "Well, it's a start". Only that happens all the time, and eventually, I started thinking How many starts does the boy need??! He makes minor progress, and then goes back to before. It's kind of annoying, because I expected some character growth.

Throughout the book excluding the last two chapters , Liam proves to be emotionally retarded. Not the normal emotional retardation that men are born with What? She likes me? How should I know??? Not at all. When does that ever work? It doesn't. Liam gets it wrong and runs away, and then everything is cleared up and he lets Deseem top him.

And BAM! Liam is a powerful Elemental and everyone fears him. Deseem has very little magic and never uses it consciously. He doesn't even feel any powers. But then! When he eventually manages to convey his feelings to Liam and shows he can do more in bed than just bottoming , it turns out he is an Elemental as well! I felt like those were kind of lost with the repetitive romance. Keep in mind, I'm a home builder, not. Glacial siren shield. The glacial siren shield is a cosmetic override unlocked by completing tier 36 of the The Knight Before Christmas event while having access to premier rewards.

Combine EditionsS. Snowflakes and Embers. Want to Read. Details if other :. Thanks for telling us about the problem. Return to Book Page. Preview — Behind A Mask by S. Behind A Mask Snowflakes and Embers 1. Deseem tries to get Liam be a little social.

A masquerade ball is coming up. But what will be Liam's reaction. Get A Copy. More Details Original Title. Snowflakes and Embers 1. Friend Reviews. To see what your friends thought of this book, please sign up.

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